sativa: (Ouran - Hunny - Bunny)
sativa ([personal profile] sativa) wrote in [community profile] snippets 2009-06-12 04:30 am (UTC)

Thank-you! This one was particularly difficult for me because Lin did not want to cooperate at all. It seemed to work better from Naru's point of view for some reason.

I do understand where you were coming from with the changing POV's though. I think it was the last sentence because I basically pulled back and kind of skipped into a vision of the immediate future. I think I've fixed that now. Thanks for pointing it out ^__^

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